Hi Laurence, Not too many notes/corrections for you. However, scene 3 is a little confusing to read because of a lack of details on how the pan happens... how did we focus on small little animals and see bigger monkeys on screen without having to zoom out? Overall, you just need to pay more attention to a few little details. You omitted the LA restaurant scene but since the script mentioned it, you need to include how you transition from the crying baby to the restaurant shot.
Hi Laurence,
ReplyDeleteI'm having trouble viewing page 2 and 3... Could you please re-upload so I can download those pages fullsize?
Thanks,
Jo
I’m sorry i don’t know why it does that it’s supposed to work now.
ReplyDeleteHi Laurence,
ReplyDeleteNot too many notes/corrections for you. However, scene 3 is a little confusing to read because of a lack of details on how the pan happens... how did we focus on small little animals and see bigger monkeys on screen without having to zoom out? Overall, you just need to pay more attention to a few little details. You omitted the LA restaurant scene but since the script mentioned it, you need to include how you transition from the crying baby to the restaurant shot.